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L. Adams's avatar

I loved everything about this story and I wish I could give it more than one like. I liked reading it slowly and catching on that there was more running underneath than what was being said on the surface—the further I read, the deeper it went and it continues deeper in my mind the more I think about it. It reads beautifully; thank you for writing it.

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Geoffrey Gevalt's avatar

So this is a sweet, sweet story. And I don't mean sweet as in candy, but sweet as in both the current slang term (as in excellent) and in terms of gentleness. I read it twice and love the understory, the main point of their dialogue.

What I am about to say should be taken with the knowledge that I am not an avid reader of fantasy. Some I like. But most I do not. And I wondered whether you needed to create a fantasy world for this, whether it could just be an imaginary place in the real world. Because the nature of this story is literary; the fantasy part, i.e., this world they live in, seems superfluous and, if anything, distracting.

In any event, thank you for bringing it to my attention and I hope my comments are taken with the knowledge that I greatly appreciated how you wrote it.

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